Title: The secrets of spider venom

Presenter: Michel Dugon

Evaluation

Content

  • You had quite a surprising introduction. My advice is give it a little more impact and to not rush so quickly into the "it's all right." I would have appreciated more time spent in your introduction to establish your credentials. You're wearing jeans and a shirt that isn't even tucked in, so you look very unprofessional to me. 
  • I liked your transition into your main point. You were proposing hypothetical benefits, and I was thinking to myself "that's a lot of what ifs," and then you sprung the fact that venom is already in development for these purposes. (This was also where you referred to yourself as a scientist, and it reminded me that you haven't given us your credentials yet -- maybe you're a biochemist.)
  • You have good examples and gave us numbers that really made me sit up in wonder. Here's a very picky thing; I think it would have had more impact if instead of saying that only .01% have been studied, go ahead and say one thousand. Maybe it's just me, but I think that the wide difference between ten million and one thousand is more striking.
  • Your story about how you capture the spiders and then the process to test them was very good. I especially liked how descriptive you were.
  • I liked your conclusion. You wrapped up with a glimpse of what we may see in the future because of these bugs, and you even gave us a way to feel like we were contributing by not killing the spider in the house. I thought that this conclusion was very good. 

Delivery

  • The organizers didn't do any favors for you by putting those waving balloons behind you as a constant distraction. To me, that was almost as distracting as having the spider crawling over you. On one hand, I thought it was fascinating to have the live spider crawling around. On the other hand, I know that I kept watching the spider and didn't pay as much attention to you.
  • I also noticed that you spent a lot of time looking at your spider instead of us in the audience. I'd be closely watching a spider I was wrangling, too, if I were in your situation. It became another reason I think it would've been more effective to put the spider in a cage after you'd introduced her to us and let you focus on presenting.
  • Another thing that distracted me was the pacing back and forth. I coach people to move with a purpose during their speech and don't just stand in one spot if you can help it. I felt there was too much aimless motion in yours, though, and it was another distraction — often, I encounter that from people who are nervous giving presentations.
  • I heard lots of verbal pauses. That's another sign to me that you're probably nervous (or maybe just not well-practiced). A goal I'd like for you to work on as a speaker is to eliminate those ahs and ums.
  • I think you have an effective personality as a presenter. Between your smile and your casual humor, you're very fun to listen to. You told the story of catching and testing spiders very effectively; I felt that the strongest component of the presentation was how well you tell stories.
  • Overall, you had very good content, and you excel as a story-teller. I felt that with more practice, you can be more comfortable and eliminate the nervous habits.

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